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Do te like this?

its a poem i made about school (its just a joke thats not how i feel about school):

school is not cool
it's just cruel,
teachers want te to do maths
because its one of their wrath,
they'll make te in detention
and when te ask they just won't mention,
they'll give te tests
so te do your best,
(but really they just do it to torture us)

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lol i liked it do u write little poems like these a lot?
ryofangirl posted più di un anno fa
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ya i do and thank te
StarGirl1721 posted più di un anno fa
 StarGirl1721 posted più di un anno fa
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Bananaaddict said:
I think it's funny! But here are some suggestions:
1. te should capitalize the first letter in each line, unless you're trying to mimic e. e. cummings.
2. I don't know if 'wrath' can be used in that context o as a plural noun.
3. te can't 'make' someone in detention. How about put?
4. The last line doesn't rhym, with doesn't really matter since it could be free verse, but the rest of the poem does rhym, so it's sort of messing with a pattern te already laid out for yourself.
Of course, te don't have to do any of that. They're just suggestions.
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posted più di un anno fa 
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thanks i will try to do it successivo time
StarGirl1721 posted più di un anno fa
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hahah i detto detentions cause i have heard of some teachers they just make u in detention and when te ask they won't answer and change the subject so thats why i postato that
StarGirl1721 posted più di un anno fa
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No detention is fine, it's just that someone "make" te in detention makes no sense. It would be better if it was "put" te in detention.
Bananaaddict posted più di un anno fa
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