I write a lot, and a girl asked for a poem. I had to write this in like 2 minutes, from what ever sprouted from my head, so I want to know, is it good?

In silvery mist, a shape appears.
A lonely woman,
Her face wet with tears.
She moves gracefully, without a sound,
Blonde hair framing her face,
The tendrils very long, sweeping the ground.
She sings a song, her notes curling through thin air.
One hand bouncing to a slow rhythm,
She sings and croons, her voice so soft that its barely there.
As she walks, te fall in love.
She is so perfect, beautiful,
Her skin seeming so soft, its like the feathers of a dove.
te miss the dead dullness in her eyes,
The sinister smirk,
The evil she attempts to disguise.
When she asks te for a favor, te concede.
Without knowing what te are doing, te walk forward.
te amble out into the thick weeds.
Her Canto continues, her voice so silky smooth.
te continue to walk, to jog, to run,
Until te cannot, te have to move.
te hear her words ringing through your head,
"Its okay, go jump."
Those are the perfect words she sang and said.
te see the end of the field, the edge of the cliff.
And as you're running, te want to halt.
She reach the edge, your face going stiff,
And te leap into the rocks below,
Shouting to the sky,
Screaming as loud as your death cry will go.
 I write a lot, and a girl asked for a poem. I had to write this in like 2 minutes, from what ever sprouted from my head, so I want to know, is it good?
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seeuvocaloid3 said:
WOAH soo beautyful amaizing
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Thank you!
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your welcome te deserve it ^^
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wantadog said:
That in two minutes?
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 That in two minutes?
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thnx
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graystone said:
Beautifully written :) te have my vote
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thnx
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PhoenixRoyale said:
I Amore poetry, and that was really good. :D
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thnk u
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Simmeh said:
Don't usually read poetry, so I'm not really one to judge, but that was great! :)
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thank you!
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You're welcome! ~^_^~
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Hurry now, send it to her if te haven't already! :D
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BeastBoyCahill said:
Wow... te wrote that in 2 minutes??
Amazing!!!
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 Wow... te wrote that in 2 minutes?? Amazing!!!
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thanks beast! and america...
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dont forget canada ! im canadian and i aprove
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and canada
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Who?
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x-menobsessed26 said:
Absolutely beautiful. Please write più as the world needs più beautiful and inspiring Scrivere in it now più than ever.
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thank te and i
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*ill try
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polarwagon15 said:
8/10
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thats great in my book
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