Don't yell like that. It gives off the vibe that you're an attention whore. I honestly like it. Grow some confidence. Believe in your skills. If te keep putting yourself down, you're not going to get better.
Look I am going to tell te the truth alright. (If anyone decide to get on my culo for this. Lemme tell te you're walking into a hornet's nest. DO NOT start.)
I don't really like it. I think it needs some improvement. I believe te can get better but te need to practice to be quite honest. I am not one for cuteness. In fact I tend to dislike things overly cute. if te like it as an artist that should be the most important that matters te know? And successivo time please don't yell. Because that will only hurt your reputation on this site and to not be considered a troll. I'd suggest te don't do that. Just practicing and te will get better and te know to have confidence in yourself and when te have confidence te will eventually get better.