I wrote this about my (now ex) boyfriend, but still felt something about the poem, if not him. I'd Amore some criticism on it (hopefully constructive) :).
Treacle dripping from our scars
Pooling on a jagged floor
te are gone, still I know
From clustered trees and homemade vows
That we are one. And as te lead
Your life of promise, graft and need
Know that we are one the same
Intertwined are cuore at name.
te may notice that only the secondo verse rhymes, this is an attempt to mostra the idea of a one-sided relationship in its form in it's one-sided rhyme scheme. This is probably quite stupid- let me know.
Treacle dripping from our scars
Pooling on a jagged floor
te are gone, still I know
From clustered trees and homemade vows
That we are one. And as te lead
Your life of promise, graft and need
Know that we are one the same
Intertwined are cuore at name.
te may notice that only the secondo verse rhymes, this is an attempt to mostra the idea of a one-sided relationship in its form in it's one-sided rhyme scheme. This is probably quite stupid- let me know.