Seen how Yamamoto got it in the end. Have to do a little rewriting

Jamie felt her body ache as she went over the map and the details of the plan to take out the latest threat they had taken on. "They get their provisions...." Her body suddenly flew up into the air, her screams turned into roars as light exploded from within her and shot up disappearing as if cutting through to another dimension. Jamies body hung there before being pummeled again. Cleo and Mac caught her body as it fell like a rag doll towards the earth. Cleo checked her vitals; her goddess was dying on her. Mac opened the bag...

Jamie plodded out of the forest with one of the packs and a borrowed chitarra slung across her front. Mira and P.B. carried the other heading towards the spiaggia near Column's sub's hidden dock. Lips was already far up ahead belting out some popolare song he was listening to on his earbuds. Jamie laughed and eyed the più than 3 miles back cabin. Smirking she put her fingers to the workout on the guitar.
Shusui was about to introduce himself to the group when he heard a voice float from the road and then the unmistakable sound of his chitarra being played like a professional. "Shusui?" Jushiro pointed...

Jamie felt the comfortable heat of the oven. The sweat poured out carrying with it the black stink of vile pasts that till recently had resided in both her girls. She smiled and allowed peace to overcome her.
Lips and Mira had parked the car in a side ditch covering it with branches before setting up booby traps and sight postings. "Mira how long do we have?" Lips asked as he climbed down from the tree. Mira took a sniff and paused stiffly. "Quietly sposta to the cabina and grab mom and P.B. we sposta now." P.B. had just finished up making the tuna pesce sandwiches from the few staples that had been...

B4 te read my idea te should read where I got my idea from. It's is da the autore Qire.

Louie healed Jean's shoulder before he took her back. "Why? Tell me why. What did I do?" Jean cried as he eased her tear streamed face into his own shoulder. Louie only tightened his grip, his emotions far too hot to be comforting. On his arrival to her apartment they were confronted da a well dressed young woman with a warm smile that turned into concern as they neared. "Is everything alright?" Louie nodded. " Just a little over tired. That's all. Excuse us." The young woman stepped aside, but did not...

Byakuya walked into the garden feeling suddenly lonely. He thought of his Hisana and paused. Looking at his mother's albero an odd memory came to him. A girl with long red hair bounced lively and carefree among its branches, while he struggled to follow. He had done this many times each time was indeed faster but never fast enough. Never like her, pausing. He followed her graceful movements barely moving a branch as she lit on one to another. His mouth dropping open as he had never seen anything so beautiful.
"Marry me." The girl suddenly fell backwards almost passing him. He snatched her arm,...

Why is it some of us seem to lose our steam o put too much in and get the story all confused. We start out all steady and calm and then when we go further in. It's like we stuck ourselves in a leaky barca to go fishing and found ourselves in one hell of a storm and of course no fish. Just sucks and that is if te don't get sea-sick in the course of it all. Now I try to pubblica this and like hitting a bacheca it won't go through. Apparently, I'm not talkative enough so please bare with me.
Tell me what your think of my story good o bad, I know it gets crazy confusing I'm trying to sort it out....

Rukia blinked at where her brother had been. Why had he suddenly disappeared? A slight breeze blew one of the robed figure's drawings over Jamies....could it be? A sudden shiver went up her spine. They were one and the same. She picked up the scattered papers going over and over the small details of the drawings and there was no mistaking it Jamie was her brother's guardian....but how could she? She sucked on her bottom lip. Who could she go to who could go where she could not. Well not until she passed her captain's test. She closed her eyes and thought. "Well she does owe me a few favors."...

Marz breathed in deeply the sweet scent of the polished wood map tavolo in Shauni's Captain's cabin. Opening his eyes he looked around the reconstructed room with no small amount of pride. It had taken over a century to collect what was left of Draco's Hoard. Crazy woman, had gone around the Horn, probably on purpose as she'd evacuated everyone before attempting it. He sighed. Marz loved her deeply, as much as he could feel Amore for another woman. He hoped rebuilding her ship would grant him even a very small hope of his Amore being reciprocated. "Marz?" Abel detto invading his giorno dream. Marz...

"Damn te Lips! How could te lose him?" Lips hit the accelerator as Mira berated him. " Will te shut the hell up! And as for the other thing....I don't know! One minuto I had him the successivo he was gone along with my tracker." Which got him a punch, punzone in the jaw. He hit his breaks making Mira nearly go threw the windshield. Experience allowed his body to block the successivo set of attacks from his side sede, sedile passenger.
He twisted her head to the sidewalk. Where two delivery men were going up a set of stairs. One was carrying two sets of Sweet Dream Tea. Mira looked at her tracker. She smiled and nodded....

Byakuya's anger seethed beneath his skin. He had been not only deceived but had been forced to forget events....no not events, moments of his life. He touched the gem in the ring that the High King had dato him to inform the royal when he had the Smith in hand. She would most definitely be in hand soon. The messenger appeared immediately with a small smile on his face but then it became perplexed as he looked around.
" Tonight at the dance, she will be with me." That made the messenger give him a startled look. "You didn't touch her did you?" Byakuya snarled. "As if I would touch such a loathsome...

Mira made the young flyboys superiore, in alto off the fuel, other liquids and wash the pretty birds before they even thought about putting on their helmets and plugging into the simulators. It took them all day. A few fist fights a couple black eyes which made the one group have to wait a giorno before they even got as far as the simulators. Those that had done the tasks as a team, with minimum arguing were already on their 2nd giorno of simulator training. "Phantom and Hawk how are your teams?" The two young men growled at each other. "Really? I thought te two wanted to fly and be the best of the best. The Elite...

Steven and Sam listened to the bullshit that Voro spouted out his well paid mouth. " Can te believe this?" Sam detto seething. Steven pressed his lips together and suddenly ran up and tackled Voro to the ground and started hitting the abusive, kidnaping jackass. "Jesus Christ Steven! " Sam ripped Steven off of Fuego. Who laid spitting blood on the conference hall's floor. Voro felt the fat lip and blackened eye coming on strong as well as at least 2 of his teeth now rattling in the back of his throat. Sitting up he spit them out. "I want this man arrested. He could even be one of the beasts...