Hey! I wrote a beginning of a song.. I didn't like it that much.. so do u think I should continue it?

it's about a break up

(More Than This)
After all that we've been through
Don't te let go on me now
I don't want any più tears
Don't te bring me down


Chorus:
I swear I'd give te più that this
If te can stay like this
I swear I'd Amore te più than this
Anything te wish
If I knew that you'd let go, oh
 smsooom posted più di un anno fa
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XxKeithHarkinxX said:
It's shitty. and kinda of,bland.

It's really flat,it needs depth to it.

It honestly up to you.
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Exactly
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brandonaz said:
nahhh it's too boring and unoriginal tbh but if te want to be a pop stella, star it's no worse than everything else on the radio
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That's what I thought of :/
smsooom posted più di un anno fa
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So scrap it.
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ok :)
smsooom posted più di un anno fa
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@brandon, that's what I thought XD
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Solas said:
I don't want to sound mean, but I think there are too many platitudes - stringing cliches together isn't good song writing.

Something else I'm wondering is: why did te choose to write about a break up?

I've never written a song before, but if I were to give te some consigli then it would be to come up with an original subject. Everybody writes about break ups - be unique! I'm sure you've had plenty of meaningful life experiences that are far più interesting. :)

Hope this helps a little.
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It did :) Thnx .. :D and I don't know actually why I chose this :P
smsooom posted più di un anno fa
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I didn't think so. That's probably what the problem was. Not to sound cheesy, but you'll probably find it easier to write about something te really believe in. Good luck with your song! :)
Solas posted più di un anno fa
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