Is This OC a Mary Sue?

Hi, so I kinda want to know if my Teen Titans OC is a terrible o good oc. I don't know so.. yeah. Here she is.
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Name: Lulu (Real name is Ashanti)
Age: 19
Gender: Female
Birthplace: Africa
Powers: Ice Powers
Looks: Lulu is a dark skinned female that has black hair that is in an afro, and she has a headband, she has wide, dark brown eyes with a small tattoo of a snowflake on her left cheek, she wears this --------> link (but he's dress is a bit longer and she wears sandles)
Personality- Lulu is loyal, kind, and happy. She doesn't like fighting o crime going on in her village in Uganda, and wishes to protect the village from any harm. Lulu is also called 'Icy' which she has ice powers from her mother, and Lulu tries her best to control herself from using them to much. Lulu also tries her best to save anyone, especially young kids, but that has never happened.
Crush: It doesn't matter-
Trivia
• Lulu is an African name that means 'a pearl' while her real name Ashanti comes from a region in southern Ghana.
• Lulu is the only child in her family.
• Lulu might have a crush on Aqualad, Speedy, o Herald.

Ok I'm done for now...
 lexidude92 posted più di un anno fa
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Famegurl754 said:
Yeah she kinda is-

Bad things
- Her backstory and flaws and etc aren't listed, which to me that personally means she has NO flaws o NO backstory.
- Having Ice Powers is sometimes very cliche in teen titan oc's.
- Putting a little più detail into her personality and looks should work.
- te decided to lista her crushes on the Trivia instead of on Crushes.

Good Things
- Her names fit her, since she is from Africa both LuLu and Ashanti would work.
- There aren't many black oc's these days so... yeah.
- Thank God she's not one of those oc's that are related to canon characters, which wouldn't work in Teen Titans.
- It would've been better if she had a fighting outfit she can turn into, fighting in a dress is complicated-

That's all I have for your oc.

And making your oc male would've worked better since your oc is female and the oc creator is female that could mean this is a self-insert, which not many people like.
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TheLefteris24 said:
Nope, I don't think so. Not that I really believed in that term anyway !!!!
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legend_of_roxas said:
I don't really think so. But it's nice to have characters that are really nice. Even if they're too nice.
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anaswill said:
To me she does seem to be a little Mary Sue-ish, but honestly if te just add a little più to her personality it can be easily resolved -- what is she bad at? What are some things she o other people wouldn't like about her? If te give her some flaws, I think it would really help to flesh her out.
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Kragfan1910 said:
It seems fine to me, but I'd have to know più about the story and her role in it before I really know.
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Peaceful_Critic said:
Yeah, she is, though I do like how she is a più varied race. However, her personality doesn't have any real flaws, I mean te detto she struggles with saving people, te just didn't give a reason why is she clumsy,cowardly o reckless, what's the problem? Why does she fail to save people, as long as it isn't she can't control her powers te should be golden. Heck even that te can get some personality out of da going the Frozen path and dive into insecurities of the detto character.

Now this isn't a flaw with your character, and instead, a nitpick, besides if te do decide to take my consigli you'll have to make major changes to the character anyway. I would like the character much better if her traits didn't go as te expect any other foreign black character go. It isn't exactly a bad thing, but having another type of personality would make her stand out way più on a personality level.Oh and another thing, happiness is an emotion, not a trait, change it to caring o something.

Also, this might be a good guide to how to make a fleshed out character. It isn't something I value as much anymore as I have watched più of the critically acclaimed cartoons(i.e Sofia the First(not exactly critically acclaimed though), Steven Universe,Amazing World of Gumball, ciao Arnold!(sorry, I used to lie about knowing this one),Over the Garden Wall, and the one I'm currently watching Heidi(she's a cliff hanger in the literal sense)) which made me realize that characters don't even need to follow it, to be considered great o fleshed out characters.Be that as it may, it'll still be something I'll suggest doing when making a character as I do find it helpful.
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 Yeah, she is, though I do like how she is a più varied race. However, her personality doesn't have any real flaws, I mean te detto she struggles with saving people, te just didn't give a reason why is she clumsy,cowardly o reckless, what's the problem? Why does she fail to save people, as long as it isn't she can't control her powers te should be golden. Heck even that te can get some personality out of da going the Frozen path and dive into insecurities of the detto character. Now this isn't a flaw with your character, and instead, a nitpick, besides if te do decide to take my consigli you'll have to make major changes to the character anyway. I would like the character much better if her traits didn't go as te expect any other foreign black character go. It isn't exactly a bad thing, but having another type of personality would make her stand out way più on a personality level.Oh and another thing, happiness is an emotion, not a trait, change it to caring o something. Also, this might be a good guide to how to make a fleshed out character. It isn't something I value as much anymore as I have watched più of the critically acclaimed cartoons(i.e Sofia the First(not exactly critically acclaimed though), Steven Universe,Amazing World of Gumball, ciao Arnold!(sorry, I used to lie about knowing this one),Over the Garden Wall, and the one I'm currently watching Heidi(she's a cliff hanger in the literal sense)) which made me realize that characters don't even need to follow it, to be considered great o fleshed out characters.Be that as it may, it'll still be something I'll suggest doing when making a character as I do find it helpful.
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Ginger_Heartail said:
Yep.

Your oc is an Elsa ripoff, even though she doesn't mostra up in Teen Titans.
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lilydude92 said:
I don't really consider your oc 'mary-sue' but to me, she doesn't seem developed that much, though I do like that she is from Africa, but, just putting in 'ice powers' is just lazy, what type of ice powers? How did she have them? Why does she have them?

"Happy" isn't a personality trait, it's an emotion, te could've used -caring- o -nice- o other words rather then -happy-

I think she stands out from being a Titan, o just a Jericho rip-off, because of "She doesn't like fighting o crime going on in her village in Uganda" which Jericho doesn't like fighting, either.

Then at the end, te detto that LuLu 'might' have a crush on Aqualad, Speedy, o Herald, why? Who does she like?

I can't imagine how she looks because of how undeveloped her looks are, te could've just showed a picture instead?

But your oc is a bit Mary-Sue-ish and a bit overpowered because of her 'ice powers'
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