What do te think...

Of my creepy poem for english?

A THOUSAND WAYS TO DIE

A thousand ways to die
Maybe a bullet in the stomach
o a bomb falling from oh-so-high
o maybe to be stabbed in the eye

I watch the children play all day
Though, little do they know
Death will hardly escape their way

I watch those children grow
Those children, I know, keep memories close to them
Nieve, so nieve
They think, " I've evaded death this long. I shant die"
But little do they know

But then they start to drop like flies
One-by-one they fall, may take days, may take years
The things they kept so dear, they don't really mind
The Amore they knew, the Friends they kepy
The truth, the lies told
All is fruitiless, in the eyes of death

Now all is detto and done,
We all lay side-by-side
Under the dirt others walk, the children are gonr
te probably think to yourself,
"when will in the dirt I lie?"
It is uncertain when o how, but I'll now clarify
There are a thousand ways to die




Any feedback?
 2dolphn97 posted più di un anno fa
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poplove said:
I think that te are a deeply troubled person with deep,deep, cycological problems!
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*psychological
Shadowmarioking posted più di un anno fa
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oh well. i no how 2 spell it. * am just rushing my typing*
poplove posted più di un anno fa
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oh. lol!
poplove posted più di un anno fa
dracofan001 said:
OMG
DEATH POEMS= EPICNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOVES IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD
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oh wow! now....that commento that i made? goes to u! *no offense*
poplove posted più di un anno fa
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no i have problems... A LOT of problems and yeah i probably need to see someone about that XD
dracofan001 posted più di un anno fa
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@dracofan0001 you're right to some extent, it is beautiful if te don't think about it too much.
Jeffersonian posted più di un anno fa
peppergirl30 said:
Well, I think it was good...just not my kinda poem.
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it is a very depresing poem....:(
poplove posted più di un anno fa
Jeffersonian said:
Dark, oh and it's naive not nieve but very darkly beautiful.
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Shit! I kept looking online for the spelling buy couldnt find it, thsnk ya :)
2dolphn97 posted più di un anno fa
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Welcome...since it was for English I figured you'd want the help.
Jeffersonian posted più di un anno fa
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Yep i kept trying to find it on spell check but than i was like what the hell! Just sxrew it lol
2dolphn97 posted più di un anno fa
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