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What do te think about my fanfiction?

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I started making it last summer, there are only oc's and i really need some feedback ( here and on deviantart ).
P.S. I f te are going to actually read it I want to say sorry for the grammar errors (english it'd not my mother language and my keyboar hates me )
 shippo_33 posted più di un anno fa
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OptimusThunder said:
I read chapters 1 and 2. Good start! I applaud your creativity and I like the premise of chapter 1.
As an aspiring writer myself, I suggest that te put in some descriptions of the surroundings and make your characters do things, sposta around and be active. Try to balance the dialogue with actions.
Also, sometimes I got confused on who was talking. Use some quick (I said) o (he said) after the dialogue to make it più clear to the reader who is talking.

Again, good work. Keep writing!
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I got the same consigli and i started adding più descrizione in the chapter 9. I can tell te tings are getting weird
shippo_33 posted più di un anno fa
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