The Rowdy Girls Article: Foster Careless chapter 1 Through the Dirt and the Gravel (1/10)

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Foster Careless chapter 1 Through the Dirt and the Gravel (1/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

The titles of my chapters are titles of songs. They are very carefully chosen.

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The first chapter is basically the season 1 finale rewritten. Everything after that is my doing.

“Any last words, agent?” Alex asked with a voice of which the malicious pleasure just dripped of. Debra looked up at him, her eyes wide in terror.
“You don’t have to do this” she begged. “You don’t have to do this”
“I know I don’t ” Alex replied careless. “Take small breaths” he advised before getting up. As Debra cried and screamed for help, he and his partner closed the coffin and buried it underneath the ground.
Everything went quiet. The only sound heard were Debra’s sobs, cries and heavy breaths. She desperately hoped the FBI would find her. Well, they would find her. Just not in time.
“Okay” Debra told herself a little reproaching. “You’re not dying in a box underneath the ground. This is not how your life’s going to end”
She brought her hands to her mouth and started chewing the ropes that tied them together. Like a hunter ripping the flesh off its prey, she jerked the ropes with her teeth.
After about five minutes, which seemed più like five hours, the ropes finally loosened. Though her hands hurt Debra awarded herself no time for complaining. She placed her hands on the ceiling and tried to open the coffin.

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LovingLucy In proper English, OF is a preposition and is meant to go in front of something, not behind. “Any last words, agent?” Alex asked with a voice of which the malicious pleasure just dripped of. Try this: "Any last words, agent?” Alex asked with a voice that just dripped of maliciousness." “I know I don’t ” Alex replied carelessly. Comma after help, As Debra cried and screamed for help Though her hands hurt (comma) Debra awarded herself no time for complaining. The only sound heard were Debra’s sobs, cries, and heavy breaths. (Added in appropriate commas) Good beginning, good teaser, well written. Creepy, though...

HaleyDewit I looked it up and 'of which' is a correct term. It's a pronom. Like here: http://english.stackexchange.com/questions/76818/usage-examples-of-of-which I absolutely appreciate your help, love. I hope you'll like the rest as well.

HaleyDewit Doesn't the word 'and' behind cries basically replace the comma?

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Foster Careless chapter 4 Deep Within (10/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

One week later.
Dale was sitting at the tavolo in his room. He held a picture of Deb in his hand. A single teardrop fell on it. “Oh, Debra” he sobbed. “Why did te have to leave? We could’ve had such a beautiful life together”
Beth walked inside from outside the kitchen.
“I made te some tea” she detto careful and she put the piatto down. Not waiting for his reaction o even a sign of gratitude, she poured him a cup.
“I mean, your sister’s worth nothing” Dale mumbled disgusted, apparently completely unaware of the fact that Beth was standing right beside him and if he did, he...

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Foster Careless chapter 4 Deep Within (6/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

Mr. and Mrs. Parker weren’t the only ones who’d had a rough night. It had taken Beth hours to fall asleep. Her entire body was in agony and besides she really didn’t want to sleep successivo to the guy who had just violently taken her virginity.
At last her tears had cost her what was left of her energy and slowly, but surely her eyelids shut.
“Hey, wake up!”
Beth opened her eyes difficult and sat upright. Dale was standing at the end of the bed, his hands on his hips. He was naked.
“It’s 6 am, are te planning on staying in letto all day?” he snapped and Beth felt tears coming up.
“I’m…I’m...

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Foster Careless chapter 3 Open Your Arms (9/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

Molly supported her head with her hands and groaned.
“Are te okay?” Ryan asked concerned and compassionate.
“Yeah, my head just feels like it’s going to explode” Molly replied faint.
“That’s not what I mean” Ryan said. “How did he get in here? Don’t te lock your doors?”
“I was going to” Molly defended herself. She stood and walked to the closet. She opened it and took out some Ibuprofen. While she swallowed a couple Turned ran off the stairs. He walked towards Ryan.
“Can I talk to te for a moment?” he demanded. “Yeah” Ryan frowned and he followed Turner away...

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Foster Careless chapter 3 Open Your Arms (8/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

What the hell was taking them so long?, Mike thought while he feverishly tried to loosen the topes his hands were tied with. What if they…?...No. No, Mike would’ve heard noises.
So far she hadn’t screamed o cried, so that was a good thing…Unless she was dead…But then what was keeping that creep inside with her so long? Why didn’t he just get out of there and kill him, too? Not that Mike wanted to die; it just seemed the most obvious conclusion.
Finally the door opened.
“Let me talk to him” he heard Debra softy say to Simon. Apparently Simon was looking at her suspiciously,...

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Foster Careless chapter 3 Open Your Arms (4/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

Debra felt a soft tap against her cheek and heard someone say her name.
“Debra? Wake up, I didn’t hit te that hard”
Debra opened her eyes challenging and gazed in the face of her attacker. She turned her head and saw the ropes around her hand. They were both tied to the armrests of the chair.
“For what it’s worth, I’m really sorry about this” the man apologized. “I just don’t think te would listen to me if I had reproach te in a più civilized way”
“Who are you? Are te one of Joe’s followers?” Debra asked tired. She heard a movement behind her and rotated her head...

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Foster Careless chapter 3 Open Your Arms (3/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

After nursing Joe’s gunshot wound Molly attended to his stab wound.
“She got te good” she whistled admiring. She took a dampened cloth and pressed it against the wound. “Any longer and you’d have gotten an infection which would’ve killed you”
Once the injury was cleaned she took needle and thread. “This might hurt a bit”
“Just…go on. Do whatever te need to do” Joe moaned, not very pleased with the prospect of having a thick needle forced through his skin, but he bit through the pain.
“You might want to remember this pain” Emma advised him, while caressing his hair....

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Foster Careless chapter 2 Snow White Queen (10/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

In the months that followed Debra spent most of her time in the library. She loved to read, as long as it wasn’t anything religious.
During the nights she slept in the park, underneath a willow. That was until the park ranger busted her and chased her away. From that moment on she slept in an alley, successivo to a Cibo container. Whenever she got hungry she would dig in the grave and pesce something out. Most of it had already passed the scadenza date, but Debra didn’t care. Cibo was Cibo and she was starving.
One night, she was only in her seventh month, she started having cramps in her stomach....

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Foster Careless chapter 2 Snow White Queen (5/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

Dale pulled himself of off Debra, who was staring ahead of her, completely in shock.
“If te want to te can clean yourself up” Dale suggested and he pointed at a door. “There’s the bathroom”
As in slow motion Debra put the toga, abito back on and climbed out of bed. Shaking on her legs she walked to the bathroom. She pushed the latch down and entered the room. She closed the door and locked it.
She turned the doccia on and undressed. When she got in the doccia the water was painfully hot, but she didn’t care. She looked down and saw blood mixing with the water.
Still feeling dirty Debra...

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Foster Careless chapter 2 Snow White Queen (3/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

At the gate there was a man waiting for them. Debra sobbed as Agnes dragged her to the gate. “Will te stop yelping already?” she snapped annoyed. She pushed her toward the man. “She’s your problem now”
“What are te going to do?” Ross asked, while he tightened his grip on Debra.
“I’m going to segnala to Dale. I’m sure he’ll want to know we found his little treasure” Agnes replied and she gave Debra a crabby look. “Use as little violence as possible. Dale wants her to look perfect on her birthday”
She walked to the house while Ross dragged Debra to the back of it, which...

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Foster Careless chapter 5 Breathe (1/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

Devastated Mike watched Debra leave with Simon. Apparently they had known each other a long time ago. Simon had detto something about helping Debra escape. What was that supposed to mean? Was she an ex-convict?
Again Mike was astounded da how little he knew about his partner and again he promised he would do something about it.
But first he had to find a way out of these ropes. He started moving and twisting his left wrist. He felt his skin burning underneath the rope, but instead of going easier he picked up the pace and a couple of painful minuti his hand was loose.
He quickly untied his right...

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Foster Careless chapter 1 Through the Dirt and the Gravel (4/10)

posted by HaleyDewit

Ryan parked his car at the dock and stepped outside. He ran to the pier towards a motor boat. On his way he’d received another call from Claire with further instructions. He had to get to a barca named Matthews. The keys would be in the ignition.
Ryan hurried into the barca and ran to the wheel. He started the barca and navigated in the instructed direction.
About thirty-seven minuti later Ryan saw a white barca and he navigated towards it. When the Matthews was right successivo to it, Ryan walked to the edge, stepped up and jumped. He could scarcely grab the gunwale of the barca and climbed on board....