ciao guys can te help me with somthing???

I have the first chapter of a new possible story but I want to see if anybody is going to read it...
And I was wondering can te guys read it and tell me what te think in a commento o email?
And I don't no the name yet so can te guys help out with that to? Its not very long o hard to read.Oh and I can give te a link to it.

And there my other story mysterious Amore te can check out on the spot articles.