For those that don’t know, “In Another World: Mob Suez” is an else-world non-cannon story that takes people’s characters and puts them into the real world. The main character of this story is Dave Hyatt, who a side-character in the regular stories I usually make. People’s origins are tweaked, and people live in a semi-civilian-based life.
I had plans for how this story would go through various phases, but I feel the most appropriate course of action would be to cancella the story.
There are a few reasons I think it’s best to simply end it. While I’ve enjoyed the world-building and creativity this brought around, the più I look at this story, the più it sounds like some cliché teenage Anime plot, and te all know how I feel about anime.
The point of the story was that the members of the club would affect the story; its progression, its characters, everything. People could send in a profilo of their character, what role they wanted their character to be a part of, and what they wanted to have happen with that character.
To say the least, many of these characters were girls. I would blame everyone except me for this, but that’s not the case. I had no less than three female characters of my own that were potential love-interests for Dave, and two that were actively pursued. I will note that I planned to have one leave for a while, and one rejects him early in the story, but there were still two other potential Amore interests aside from that, one that was owned da me, and one owned da Rawrmonster123, who has left the community.
It wasn’t just that there were too many love-interests, but that the majority of characters were girls. I would not be able to balance this.
This wasn’t the only issue as I found trying to please everyone’s initial requests (including love-lives) difficult. There were senza risposta plot-threads that were not going to go anywhere. It wasn’t a mess quite yet but it would become one. One particular plot-hole that bothered me was that an earthquake goes off and the police never appear about it. This was pretty stupid.
I quite enjoyed MANY things about this story, and I had a surprise about Rin and Ira (Virus) that was going to be revealed, but I simply don’t think the story can stand long enough for that.
Not to mention there is literally NO interaction from people when it comes to how the story will play out, and we all know why that is.
Those who were Leggere it have vanish save a very tiny amount. I simply don’t think this story is worth continuing, at least not right now. MAYBE in the future I’ll go back and fix it all but not right now.
Sorry to let down whoever might read this but them’s the breaks.
God Bless,
Eat Pie and Prosper
I had plans for how this story would go through various phases, but I feel the most appropriate course of action would be to cancella the story.
There are a few reasons I think it’s best to simply end it. While I’ve enjoyed the world-building and creativity this brought around, the più I look at this story, the più it sounds like some cliché teenage Anime plot, and te all know how I feel about anime.
The point of the story was that the members of the club would affect the story; its progression, its characters, everything. People could send in a profilo of their character, what role they wanted their character to be a part of, and what they wanted to have happen with that character.
To say the least, many of these characters were girls. I would blame everyone except me for this, but that’s not the case. I had no less than three female characters of my own that were potential love-interests for Dave, and two that were actively pursued. I will note that I planned to have one leave for a while, and one rejects him early in the story, but there were still two other potential Amore interests aside from that, one that was owned da me, and one owned da Rawrmonster123, who has left the community.
It wasn’t just that there were too many love-interests, but that the majority of characters were girls. I would not be able to balance this.
This wasn’t the only issue as I found trying to please everyone’s initial requests (including love-lives) difficult. There were senza risposta plot-threads that were not going to go anywhere. It wasn’t a mess quite yet but it would become one. One particular plot-hole that bothered me was that an earthquake goes off and the police never appear about it. This was pretty stupid.
I quite enjoyed MANY things about this story, and I had a surprise about Rin and Ira (Virus) that was going to be revealed, but I simply don’t think the story can stand long enough for that.
Not to mention there is literally NO interaction from people when it comes to how the story will play out, and we all know why that is.
Those who were Leggere it have vanish save a very tiny amount. I simply don’t think this story is worth continuing, at least not right now. MAYBE in the future I’ll go back and fix it all but not right now.
Sorry to let down whoever might read this but them’s the breaks.
God Bless,
Eat Pie and Prosper
After math class, Cynthia walked to her boyfriend, Mars.
"How was class?" he asked, "Sucked." answered Cynthia.
After school, Cynthia was walking out the building when all of a sudden, a female hedgehog skateboarded in front of her, both falling down.
"Hey! Watch it punk!" The hedgehog answered dusting off her black jeans.
"I'm sorry, but who are you?" Cynthia asked in a concerned tone.
"None of your business thats who!" She exclaimed.
"You must be Darklin, Shadow's sister." The bat admitted, "Yeah your right, but barge in front of me like that you'll be getting stitched up!" Darklin yelled skateboarding away.
"How was class?" he asked, "Sucked." answered Cynthia.
After school, Cynthia was walking out the building when all of a sudden, a female hedgehog skateboarded in front of her, both falling down.
"Hey! Watch it punk!" The hedgehog answered dusting off her black jeans.
"I'm sorry, but who are you?" Cynthia asked in a concerned tone.
"None of your business thats who!" She exclaimed.
"You must be Darklin, Shadow's sister." The bat admitted, "Yeah your right, but barge in front of me like that you'll be getting stitched up!" Darklin yelled skateboarding away.
Name:Salena Raqque Nagato
Age:19
Physical Apperence:Dark Pink-Red hair, with a light rosa body
Species:Hedgebat
Occupation:The keyboard guitauir(pretty much a guiair in any shape, with buttons) for stella, star SOS
Friends:Anna the Hedgehog, Miranda the Echinda, and Kagimi the Cat
Enimes:Dr.Eggmansign
Faveriote color:Black
Faveriote Sign:Peace
Outfits:A black tank, and light rosa skirt
Black dress with red hearts
Ride:None
Parents:Alicia Nagoto(Birth Mother), Veronica and James Calico(Adopted
Height:4 ft.
Backstory:Salena had longer hair, but when she was about 3, her birth mother(Alicia)cut it off.Soon, she was taken from her birth family and put into the Calico family.She vowed to be like the good side of her mother as soon as she got there.She has a very scattered romantic past, and three friends(Anna, Kagimi, and Miranda) who were like her sisters her entire life.
Age:19
Physical Apperence:Dark Pink-Red hair, with a light rosa body
Species:Hedgebat
Occupation:The keyboard guitauir(pretty much a guiair in any shape, with buttons) for stella, star SOS
Friends:Anna the Hedgehog, Miranda the Echinda, and Kagimi the Cat
Enimes:Dr.Eggmansign
Faveriote color:Black
Faveriote Sign:Peace
Outfits:A black tank, and light rosa skirt
Black dress with red hearts
Ride:None
Parents:Alicia Nagoto(Birth Mother), Veronica and James Calico(Adopted
Height:4 ft.
Backstory:Salena had longer hair, but when she was about 3, her birth mother(Alicia)cut it off.Soon, she was taken from her birth family and put into the Calico family.She vowed to be like the good side of her mother as soon as she got there.She has a very scattered romantic past, and three friends(Anna, Kagimi, and Miranda) who were like her sisters her entire life.
Heres my lista in characters, i'll need my copy for reminders!
Cynthia: School beauty, man's lady!, Mars' Girlfriend
Mars: School Bully, Cynthia's boyfriend
Zalara: popolare Girl, Sonic's Cousin
Venom: Silent Girl, reads a lot, has no friends, Rouge's Cousin
Darklin: Goth Girl, never listens, Shadow's sister
Rouge: Pretty Girl, Shadow's Girlfriend
Shadow: Silent Boy, Rouge's Boyfriend
Sonic: Annoying Kid, Zalara's Cousin, Hates Venom
Amy: Annoying as heck kid, likes Sonic
Tikal: Likes Knuckles, Kind kid
Knuckles: Bully wannabe, Wants to be Friends with Mars
Death: School Jerk, has no friends
Cynthia: School beauty, man's lady!, Mars' Girlfriend
Mars: School Bully, Cynthia's boyfriend
Zalara: popolare Girl, Sonic's Cousin
Venom: Silent Girl, reads a lot, has no friends, Rouge's Cousin
Darklin: Goth Girl, never listens, Shadow's sister
Rouge: Pretty Girl, Shadow's Girlfriend
Shadow: Silent Boy, Rouge's Boyfriend
Sonic: Annoying Kid, Zalara's Cousin, Hates Venom
Amy: Annoying as heck kid, likes Sonic
Tikal: Likes Knuckles, Kind kid
Knuckles: Bully wannabe, Wants to be Friends with Mars
Death: School Jerk, has no friends